if you want the text to be changed send a complete sentence.
I do not have the time to carefully understand your points. Sorry guys.
I'm too buzy.

Stef

On 2 mai 06, at 00:45, Todd Blanchard wrote:

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> On May 1, 2006, at 12:42 PM, Herbert König wrote:
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>> Hello,
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>> I like the tone of the welcome message but I feel the English is not
>> completely correct. Some native speaker please look into this.
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> Oh look - something I'm accidentally qualified to contribute. :-)
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>> line 2:
>> brlso> Squeak is a really cool and powerful environment but  
>> Smalltalk is an
>>                                                         ^^^
>> I think this should read ...  and (not but) Smalltalk is an  
>> elegant and powerful
>>
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> That is correct.  "and" is a better choice.
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>> ...
>>
>> Not sure about the next two ones.
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>> brlso> elegant and powerful language, however it is different than
>>                                                               ^^^^
>> however it is different from (not than) traditional languages...?
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> also correct. (should be from - many natives get this wrong BTW).
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>>
>> brlso> traditional languages, so do not hesitate to ask questions.  
>> We will do
>> brlso> our best to answer them and to learn with you.
>>                                    ^^
>> omit the to?
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> No - "We will do our best to answer them and to learn with you" is  
> technically correct.
>
> In the US, informally it might be rendered as "We will do our best  
> to answer them and learn with you"
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> Either, I believe, is acceptable.
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>> brlso> We created this list so that any newcomers in squeak can  
>> dare to ask
>> brlso> all the questions they have, so enjoy it.
>>
>>
>> Cheers
>>
>> Herbert                            mailto:herbertkoenig at gmx.net
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